My trip to Easter Island in winter 2016 was the best holiday I’ve
ever had. Firstly, I could stay with my family even when I thought I couldn’t,
because we were on strike at university during the year and my summer holidays would be very
short. Mom someday called me and she said “I have your airplane ticket, you are coming here next week”, I was the
happiest girl on earth. I had great holidays between a school year haha. Also, I met a lot of interesting persons meanwhile
I was working for my parent bussines in Easter Island: I was a part- time secretary , so I had to talk with lot of people
every day, it was very funny. I had the chance to improve my English level and
pronunciation because many people came
from England or USA. Finally, I could develop myself as a good human being, because I took care of two cute
puppies which were homeless: I got them and took them to the vet. I fed them and took care of them since I could
found a great family for each one, it was a little difficult for the female puppy, but I did it. I felt really good when it happened.
Full of love, good food and near to a part of my family which I don't see in all year; no doubts, my trip to Easter Island last winter was the best holiday I could ever had! :D
They both are "Lyanna" (the black puppy) and her brother Eddard alias "Ned", my two rescued puppies :)
Full of love, good food and near to a part of my family which I don't see in all year; no doubts, my trip to Easter Island last winter was the best holiday I could ever had! :D
They both are "Lyanna" (the black puppy) and her brother Eddard alias "Ned", my two rescued puppies :)
Hi Barbara, such a great vacations! I feel a little jealous hahah. I noticed that because the name of your puppies you're a big GOT fan, same in here <3
ResponderEliminarBeware, you put two "O" in "schoolar" and you forgot to put some verbs in the correct form when you talked about past.
See you!
Hi Barbara! your puppies is very very beautiful!. where are they now?. Beware!, you forgot put one "L" in finally and perhaps put "much" instead of "a lot", is a recomendation.
ResponderEliminarCare and regars!
Hi!! well, the puppies got a new family and now they are growing up happy and full of love :D
EliminarHello Barbara, what a nice story. I could imagine the joy of been with your family in that magic place!! I was trying to find a mistake u¿in your post (muahaha) but it was a little bit impossible.. Maybe in the part "I had a little great holidays between a schoolar year" you should change the plural word holidaysss to singular.
ResponderEliminarRegards!
My trip to Easter Island in winter 2016 was the best holiday I’ve ever had. (TS)
ResponderEliminarFirstly, I could stay with my family even when I thought I couldn’t, because we were on strike (classes) AT UNIVERSITY DURING THE YEAR and my summer holidays would be very short. (SS1)
Mom someday called me and she (told) SAID “I have your airplane ticket, you are coming here (on) next week”, I was the happiest girl (in the) ON earth.(SS2? EXPLANATION?)
I had [a=SINGULAR] little great [holidays=PLURAL] between a school[ar] year haha. (COMMENT)
Also, I (meet) MET a lot of interesting (persons) PEOPLE meanwhile I was working for my parent’S buSinesS in Easter Island (SS3)
I was a part- time secretary , so I had to talk with A lot of people every day, it was very funny. (EXPLANATION)
I had the chance to improve my (e(English level and pronunciation because many people came from (e)England or USA (EXAMPLE)
FinaLly, I could develop myself as a good human being, . (SS4)
because I took care of two cute puppies which were homeless: I got them and took them to the vet. (EXPLANATION)
I fed them and took care of them since I could found a great family for each one, it was a little difficult for the female puppy, but I did it. I felt really good when it happened.(EXPLANATION)
Full of love, good food and near to a part of my family which I don't see in all year; no doubts, my (travel) TRIP to Easter Island (on) last winter was the best holiday I could ever had! :D
Barbara,
In general terms, your structure is OK, make sure it is crystal clear which sentences are supporting sentences and which ones are comments-examples-explanations. There shouldn’t be any strain on the reader.
You do need to improve your edition work, though. You have a bit too many spelling, grammar, word order, consistency singular plural mistakes. Have a closer look at your text next time.
Cheers,
teacher, las palabras o letras entre corchetes, por ejemplo "school[ar]" están sobrando? por ejemplo tampoco me queda claro este término "to Easter Island (on) last winter", ahi el On no va? en las oytras oraciones entiendo que va una palabra cambiada y sale cual debe ser la correcta, pero esta frase no la entiendo.
ResponderEliminarTampoco entiendo esta frase "I had [a=SINGULAR] little great [holidays=PLURAL] between a school[ar] year haha." como sería de forma correcta?
saludos y gracias!
Ciao Mr. e Mrs. io condividere una buona notizia con voi. Ero davvero in difficoltà Financials e il mio cortile di ricerca, ho incontrato una signora molto sympat che offre prestiti a chi è nel bisogno. Lasciate che vi dica che il mio aiuto con un prestito che ho usato per la scolarizzazione dei miei figli così i miei amici non chère usciti da un contatto che signora così gentile elettronica, essere rassicurati vi lascerà molto molto felice.
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Grazie!
Thanks for your great article.
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